- Dan O'Mac
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Re: Hockey League of North America(Est.2006)
So there's not too much to work off of here. We know a general premise and the teams. What I can recommend is to take some time before you post to check your grammar and spelling. When you're doing a series with no graphics, your story means everything. And when that's the case, you want to make sure all your stuff is correct and ready. Just from the city names of the teams, you have three cities that are misspelled in all capital, bold letters (Toledo, Tucson and Sacramento). If you have to go slower with your presentation to get the spelling and grammar all correct, please do. I, for one, would prefer a slower content output that is good content.
As far as your teams, I'm not sure why you went with "Express" for Green Bay. That moniker is usually used in conjunction with trains (oooo, that's a School House Rock reference!), and Green Bay doesn't really have a railroad background. With us on the mouth of the Fox River on Green Bay, we get a lot more shipping via the waterways.
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Re: Hockey League of North America(Est.2006)
South Division:
OKLAHOMA CITY BISONS:
Founded: 2005
Based In: Oklahoma City
Arena: Bisons’ Arena
Head Coach: Elliot Black
GM: James Wolf
Colors: Blue, Red, White
Notable NHL Players: None
NEW MEXICO INVASION:
Founded: 2005
Based in: Albuquerque, New Mexico
Arena: Coliseum of Central New Mexico
Head Coach: Francis Swindle
GM: Jean-Francois Napoleon
Colors: Black, Green, White
Notable NHL Players: None
AUSTIN COYOTES:
Founded: 2005
Based in: Austin, Texas
Arena:The Stephen F. Austin Center
Head Coach: Mason Love
GM: Chase Knight
Colors: Black, White
UTAH RAPTORS:
Founded: 2005
Based In: Salt Lake City, Utah
Arena: Citizenship Arena
Head Coach: Jerry King
GM: Timothy Titan
Colors: Purple, Maroon, Black
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Re: Hockey League of North America(Est.2006)
CubsOrSox10 wrote:
AUSTIN COYOTES:
Founded: 2005
Based in: Austin, Texas
Arena:The Stephen F. Austin Center
Head Coach: Mason Love
GM: Chase Knight
Colors: Black, White
UTAH RAPTORS:
Founded: 2005
Based In: Salt Lake City, Utah
Arena: Citizenship Arena
Head Coach: Jerry King
GM: Timothy Titan
Colors: Purple, Maroon, Black
Two things here:
- In-universe, it’s unlikely that the NHL—or I guess what’s left of it—would allow a team to use the name of one of their franchises.
- There’s a Utah Raptors already in existence in the AltSports Universe.
Honestly, like Dan said, I think you need to take time and prepare this stuff before you publish it. This has a lot of potential, though, and it should be the best it can be.
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Re: Hockey League of North America(Est.2006)
AUSTIN COYOTES:
Founded: 2005
Based in: Austin, Texas
Arena:The Stephen F. Austin Center
Head Coach: Mason Love
GM: Chase Knight
Colors: Black, White
UTAH RAPTORS:
Founded: 2005
Based In: Salt Lake City, Utah
Arena: Citizenship Arena
Head Coach: Jerry King
GM: Timothy Titan
Colors: Purple, Maroon, Black
Two things here:
- In-universe, it’s unlikely that the NHL—or I guess what’s left of it—would allow a team to use the name of one of their franchises.
- There’s a Utah Raptors already in existence in the AltSports Universe.
Honestly, like Dan said, I think you need to take time and prepare this stuff before you publish it. This has a lot of potential, though, and it should be the best it can be.
The NHL is not really an problem, NO.1, they are completely gone, NO.2, They got permission from Gary Bettman. I will try to put more time into it, and have a better world all together. Thanks for the Advice. The Season will be up tommorow and then i’ll post Canada.
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